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stegoodie View Profile History	Profile 2.0 Posted : 19 May, 2011 11:36 PM Hey ladies (and gents), I made some major changes to my profile so I was wondering if you all could take a look and tell me what you think (don't pull any punches please). Many thanks. Post Reply
joesgeo View Profile History	Profile 2.0 Posted : 20 May, 2011 12:27 AM Break up large blocks of text into paragraphs. Post Reply
bcpianogal View Profile History	Profile 2.0 Posted : 20 May, 2011 06:20 AM I enjoyed reading it...it held my attention! You could break up some of the larger paragraphs, but they weren't so long that I wanted to skip on to the next one. Nice job explaining about Mennonites. Also, nice job on your explanation of wanting someone with higher education. Overall, I think it's good. Post Reply
stegoodie View Profile History	Profile 2.0 Posted : 20 May, 2011 07:32 AM Thanks to both of you. I went ahead and broke things up a little bit. Post Reply
View Profile History	Profile 2.0 Posted : 20 May, 2011 08:08 AM looks great, Stegoodie Post Reply
View Profile History	Profile 2.0 Posted : 20 May, 2011 01:15 PM My suggestions: Drop the part at the beginning that talks about how there don't seem to be any young ladies in your area. You DO NOT want to start your profile out with something negative like that. My suggestion is you take it out and leave it out. Frankly, your profile was too long. I rarely read through a profile with that much text. That's just me. I will say you did a good job of explaining Mennonites in just a few sentences. I suggest different pictures, or at least a different main picture. Your main pic has you standing with your arms crossed, which is generally a subliminal negative message (you are closed, you are guarded, you are protecting yourself, you are not open). Even if that was the farthest from your mind when you took it --- that is the subliminal message you send. The other pics are good, but I suggest you get another to use as your main profile pic. Post Reply
View Profile History	Profile 2.0 Posted : 20 May, 2011 01:47 PM Looks good, plenty of detail without being boring and you've described who you are and what you're looking for. The only thing that jarred me was the comment about someone with kid(s) already - I'm not saying you should reconsider what you want, only how it's worded. Or maybe leave it out altogether and just mention it when you start a dialogue. Post Reply
stegoodie View Profile History	Profile 2.0 Posted : 20 May, 2011 03:55 PM Thanks for the input Godslamb and dkj. I adjusted a few of my comments. Post Reply